"But, I don't have money to do that..." I said "Well, I have..." she told me
"I'm not going to use your money..." I told her
"But, I'm hungry too..." she said
"fine, but only if you pay it..." I said
She smiled, and said "OK..."
With an evil-smile Fran looked at me, and she had a piece of paper...
I looked at the paper, the paper read:
And as the paper said I passed out...
I woke up, looked arround, it wasn't a place that I have seen before... But, were is the kitchen?
Someone is standing in front of something...
The person who was standing in front of something, started walking my way...
I closed my eyes and opened then again...
I want to go home, and I feel like I know the way,I tried to get off the couch, but my legs can't carry me...
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Oh you evil little Fran!
Poor Areya, I really feel for her.
How could you do that to her?
I was only reading her mind, and writing it...
Yes, like I believe that!
Evil! Evil! Evil!
=P
Cool!!! I like it a lot
Where do think Areya is?
I don't know where I am...
You don't know where you are?
:O Really interested
I think she is in HIS house.. I saw the "girl" that was dancing with her..
Maybe she poisoned her drink, that's why Areya feels so sick and her legs are so weak
I want to know what's next!
The Areya passed out part was really spooky and imaginative, and the way she sees all blurry also looks great!!! I wonder what happened to her and where is she, good job Fran
I wanted to poison Miss CrumpleBottom's drink, you know?
Oh, well...
I was waiting for this part and it came out! :D
I really like it and can't wait for the next chapter! :D
My dear Fran, I loved it! Wonderful effect on the pics to show how blurry her vision is!
That must be a very scary feeling for her to find herself in a strange place and feeling sick!
Great job my dear, can't wait for the next part! :D
Thank you!
Oh, now I am scared for Areya. Who is the scary person?
What is he/she going to do?
Great update! :D
Whoa! I wasn't expecting that at all! That was creepy how Fran held the paper and then Areya passed out. I love creepy stuff, lol.
And the blurred effect on the room was awesome - nice effect to let us see it through her eyes. Mind if I 'borrow' that sometime?
Pretty good stuff here, missy! Keep up the good work.
Oh, that screams of kidnapping... possibly date rape. Did she drink anything? I missed it... Maybe her new found friend will rescue her. Or, hopefully, someone!
I hope it wasn't him... I mean her... that did this to her! LOL!
Loved the blurred effect in your pictures! Keep up the good work! :)
Yay! I got here!! This was really good Fran! You are doing such a great job!!
And you have put a wonderful twist into the story. Or should I say evil? Heh heh heh!!!
The picture of the note was startling, and effective. Brilliant! And so was the blurred reality of Areya's awakening.
Keep it up!
Colliegirl, don't worry...
I'm not going to kill her, and maybe I am!
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